This is so perfectly on character, I couldn't help but feel like I was watching the show in my mind's eye!
My only criticism (very minor and unasked) is that the ending seems a little rushed -- I feel a little more elaboration on the physical confrontation between Sally and Dick would make the ending feel less surprising. I don't think it would have to be much -- perhaps just a blow or two and maybe some token Feminism phrase (like "I am woman, hear me roar!") to go out on.
But, you know, it's really EFFING FANTASTIC! Your grasp of characterization is top notch! <3 <3
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My only criticism (very minor and unasked) is that the ending seems a little rushed -- I feel a little more elaboration on the physical confrontation between Sally and Dick would make the ending feel less surprising. I don't think it would have to be much -- perhaps just a blow or two and maybe some token Feminism phrase (like "I am woman, hear me roar!") to go out on.
But, you know, it's really EFFING FANTASTIC! Your grasp of characterization is top notch! <3 <3